In modern society, we do see women powers, such as Mad am Thatcher, Hillary Clinton, and Wu Yi, the vice Premier of China who played an important role in these critical days against SARS. But why have they drawn people's attention? Just because they are women and female leaders are too rare to be seen.
Taking into account all the relevant factors, we may safely conclude that we won't make progress in the achievement of women's status and their equal opportunities if people's traditional ideas, men's attitude, society's burden remain unchanged. The picture isn't quite rosy. Equality with men continues to be the goal of modern civilized society.

简 评
文明社会发展到今天，女性的地位是否彻底地改观了?如果女性的地位是一个社会发展水平的标志，那么我们的社会正处在哪一个阶段?
文章首尾呼应，最后一段总结扣题，是文章的可取之处。开篇引用名人名言导入文章中心句(thesis statement)，看似提出质疑，实际观点明确。而结尾综述总结论证，再次明确自己的立场，指出“．．．we won't make progress in the achievement of women's status and their equal opportumtms if people's traditional ideas，men's attitude，society's burden remain unchanged．．．．Equality with men continues tO be the goal ofmodern civilized society．”
文章条理清晰，从传统观念的束缚、男性群体对女权运动的反作用和女性的双重社会责任带给她们的困惑这三个方面充分论证了女性的不平等地位。文章的不足之处在于，第三段关于男性在女权运动中的作用论述不够深入。通常在面对一个相对较难阐述的问题时，可以借用比喻或恰当的例证，使论述更容易理解，更有说服力。
(点评教师：卢爱华)

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